I was just finishing work and heading for home. It was raining hard, and all I had on was my denim jacket and light trousers. Work had been quite stressful today as I was pulled in for a disciplinary after telling a customer I didn’t like her attitude. Apparently grabbing hold of her collar and telling her to “F OFF” isn’t a good idea in our line of work.
Anyway, I was heading for the bus station when a car pulls up beside and there is a woman in there – a brunette – and she asks me for directions to the shopping centre. I shake my head but try to keep my cool. I needed to stop losing my temper so much and this woman seemed nice. So I swallowed my anger and went over to the window and started to give her directions. She began to look confused and shook her head. “I tell you what”, she said. “If I give you a lift there, I’ll you home afterwards” For some reason this didn’t bother me. It should, after all this was a stranger, and even at my age of 53 I should still be nervous of strangers.
I agreed and climbed in. As soon as I did, a wave of calmness overwhelmed me. I smiled as it was a feeling I had not felt since before I had watched my parents put their plane into the side of the cliff.
“My name’s Rona. What’s yours?” the woman asked.
“Derek” I replied. I was confused as I don’t normally give my name out.
“Can you grab my pen and paper from the glove compartment?” as she pointed to a small door in front of me. I opened it and took out them, and she asked me how to spell my name. I looked at her and shook my head smiling. I pressed the top of the pen and felt a small pinprick in my finger then nothing …..
Continues in part two: An Offer Too Good
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What a teaser you are! And?????
There’s a part two
Ooooh – I like!
Thanks
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I like the story – at first I read it in english and then I translate it with google. A interesting story. You tell more about the little pinprick in the finger what will be now happend?
I’m going to do the second part in the next couple of days
You were dreaming!…. but as they say ‘Take care out there’
Haha I like that
You have me hooked on this and can’t wait to see what happens next! Part Two is definitely in order.
Waiting for part 2…….
Well, that’s everybody who has commented then that has said about a part two. Guess I will have to
Good, there you go…you cannot leave it at a cliffhanger….. really, it can develop into a great story…. 007 even…haha
Haha … maybe … I did have an idea where I wanted tot take it so I think I will ;-D
Brilliant!
Loved it and I agree, a part 2 is definitely in order.
I would love to see part 2 also… But one thing is for sure – I won’t be using click pens anymore for a while.
LOL
Hmmm…wonder what her plan is.
Just thinking, I don’t click pens that way. I flip them over and press the end against the writing surface.
LOL You never know what’s in the end of a pen.
This is the first story I have written. Well since I was at school, and I left there nearly 30 years ago. I did have an idea about the pen, and her plan but I had already gone over the time by a minute, and writing the rest would have meant quite a bit more. Maybe I’ll do a part two at some point or just leave it there for people’s imaginations.
I would love to see a part 2.
I may do it at some point soon then