Friday Fictioneers: Tell Laura I Love Her

Every week, Rochelle gives us a photo to use as a prompt for a 100 word piece of fiction. If you want to have a go, then visit Rochelle’s page HERE. If you want to see stories other people have written, then click on the little cute creature just below.

This story is part of the Raynard / Saskia series which you can find here on my page, and here where Jules writes Saskia’s side.


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The duo played their slow rendition of Tell Laura I Love Her, which caused the crowd to return to their drinks and conversations. One man fed his way through the tables and left barely a breeze in his wake as he moved with such grace that no patron noticed him. He seemed intent on finding someone as his eyes scanned the tables, the bar, and the shadows. He walked to the bar to order a drink, and slid several coins across the bar. As he held the drink in his hand, Raynard heard the words “pale Gulliver”. He listened to the direction the voices went and followed them out of the building.

*Pale Gulliver is a code name Jules uses for people who recognise vampires.

*The story immediately continues on Jules’ blog, with a description of what happens as Raynard walks outside. You can find that here.

50 thoughts on “Friday Fictioneers: Tell Laura I Love Her

  1. This story was fantastic – and I finished it with Jules also. So good and I’m glad there are people looking after us mortals! Makes me feel safe. Thanks! Nan 🙂

    • Thanks Nan. There’s not a lot to make to make Raynard back off, so those people don’t know how lucky they were 🙂

  2. Uh huh, I would expect Raynard could pass through a crowd like that. I vaguely remember the Pale Gulliver code word. I think that’s pretty cool.

  3. You described the grace of the vampire perfectly. I also enjoyed the music. I agree that the slower-paced song was better in this instance. So we all wait for the next episode. 🙂 Well done.

  4. One man fed his way through the tables leaving barely a breeze in his wake and moving with such grace that no patron noticed him. This line is so good. I can see and feel his passing. Good story.

    (Walking up to the bar to order a drink and slid several coins across the bar. Perhaps you mean “walked up to the bar”? If not, ignore me.)

  5. Pingback: Friday Fictioneers: Vamp addition: Singing the ‘Pale Gulliver’ Blues | Jules in Flashy Fiction

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