Sunday Photo Fiction: Dead On Target

Every week a photo is used a prompt for a piece of fiction in around 200 words. If you want to have a go, then head over to Sunday Photo Fiction and see what you think. This is one of the last entries for this week, as I haven’t had a lot of time this week due to personal reasons, so there are about three hours left on this challenge. If you are interested, a new challenge will start at around 4 am UK time.

If you want to see what other people have written, then go through this link and read a couple of the stories.

This is part of an ongoing story that you can find at the top under Fiction/Daniel’s Legacy – Dan’s Story. To make it easier, I have also turned that into a link so you don’t have to go up there to look. See, I’m nice like that. Dan is a private investigator finding why some people on his home planet are being murdered. The one person who had been helping them was Major Zoe Keegan, but she died in an elevator accident. Dan had a hunch that she was not dead and questioned the new commander of the base who took over from the Major, Captain Manatee. He refused to answer any of the questions about her, and asked them to leave …

81 10 October 12th 2014

Dead On Target

It had been five days since Dan and Dahlia saw Captain Manatee and questioned him about Captain Zoe Keegan under the pretence of wanting to create a memorial for her. In that time, he set up hidden video cameras around the base to see if his hunch was true about Keegan still being alive, and that Manatee knew everything that went on with her.

 He quietly made his way to where one of the cameras pointed at the buildings. He moved the foliage and swapped the memory cards, removing the one with recorded data and replacing it with a fresh one. He took off his prosthetic hand and slid the full card inside, and then reattached the hand back on to his wrist. He quietly moved away, making sure the camera was still hidden.

Dahlia started the vehicle as she saw Dan exiting the woods, and drove them towards the House of Worship. As they passed the outer area of the base, Dan pointed to an area that seemed to have been demolished recently, and judging by the angle, the camera should have at least some shot of it.


The vicar ushered them into the back room and Dan removed the card from its hidden compartment and placed it into the viewing machine. After two hours of watching, Dan’s hunch was proved true as Zoe Keegan stepped out of a door and met Captain Manatee, who seemed to have been expecting her.

16 thoughts on “Sunday Photo Fiction: Dead On Target

    • Thank you Kim. I changed part of it, because it seemed a little too far-fetched – even with this story. I just need to work the dynamics out of it

  1. I’m going to have to go back and read some of the later episodes; I think I’ve missed a couple…seventeen and eighteen, I think. This is getting betterer and betterer, Alastair 😀

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