Every week, a new photo is used as a prompt for a piece of fiction in around 200 words. If you want to have a look at the challenge, then go to Sunday Photo Fiction, and if you want to read what others have written, then go through this link.
I sit watching mummy putting her make up on, she puts more on one side of her face where she hurt herself when her and daddy were shouting. I don’t know how she did it, but daddy hurt his hand as well. It’s odd that they both hurt themselves at the same time. Daddy wants to stroke mummy’s face but she moves away quickly. I think he made her jump.
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Yay, we’re going to the seaside. I love the seaside. They have telescopes and boats and I can throw stones in the water.
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I ask for some money for the telescope, and I run ahead of mummy and daddy. I put the coins in the telescope and look through it. I look at the boys and girls playing in the water, and they look strange. They look like they have wings. I turn the camera and look at mummy and daddy and I am scared. Mummy looks so beautiful, but daddy looks horrid. He has the face of an evil man.
I step away from the telescope and a strange man tells me it is a telescope of true sight. It shows the soul of the person.
Kids know more than given credit for when stuff like this happens behind closed doors…
They do, and I hate to think it happens all too often
Some folks seem to be able to see the truth without that telescope.
Just watched an NCIS episode where it was the child who was evil.
And another where the abused child had developed a split personalty to try and save themselves. Eek.
I saw a Criminal Minds where it was the child that was evil. Seriously so He killed his brother for wetting the bed.
I stopped watching Criminal Minds years ago… just too –
eek. Do you remember the movie ‘The Other’.
Talk about sibling rivalry!
No, I’ve not seen that movie. Will have to look out for it
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/The_Other
Thank you 🙂
Very sad! Gave me the chills!
Thanks Elaine. It wasn’t an easy write
Some days I could use a telescope like that. Great story
I wish I one had one as well. It would certainly have changed a few of my decisions in my past.
That was sad. A very different take on the prompt, Alastair, but very well written.
Thanks Lyn. I know it is a theme I have covered before in one form or another as I abhor domestic abuse in all of its forms.
Me too, Alastair, me too. Been there, and I do not intend to buy the t-shirt.
Yeah I understand that
Dark but well written. Like the twist in the end.
Thanks very much. It was quite difficult to write, trying to show it from a child’s perspective.
Fantastic piece of writing!
Thanks very much Udita. How are you doing?
I’m alright most of the times, messed up every now and again. Which is why my blog’s gone all erratic.. but trying to get back on track xx
Take your time and make sure you get yourself sorted first. We aren’t going anywhere.
Wowsa. Maybe even scarier for the kid, yet very true.
Sad for the mother and the kid, and too often the case
Oh man… that was… it… made me shudder…
It made me feel ill as I wrote it. The thought of what that kid saw without knowing and then seeing what the father was really like.
It worked on so many levels