Friday Fictioneers – Hiking

Every week, the gifted Rochelle shares with us a photo that has been donated so we can write a story or poem in 100 words or less. If you want to have a go, then click on the Friday Fictioneers image, and if you want to read what others have written, then click on the little blue frog image.


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© Jan Wayne Fields

Barry knew today was going to be tough. He never liked walking too far, and the activity today was to walk fifteen miles. He didn’t like walking fifteen feet except when he woke up in the morning and went to his game console. He would much prefer playing Call of Battlefield than walking outdoors.

His dour attitude started to grate on the other hikers who turned up to enjoy the walk. They didn’t want him bringing their happiness down, so they faced off with him. The confrontation was intense but in the end, he agreed to try and enjoy it.

54 thoughts on “Friday Fictioneers – Hiking

  1. I love this. Would you take a second to look at my blog and let me know your thoughts 🙂 it would be greatly appreciated! Trying to get my works out there!!!!

  2. Thanks for explaining “intense”. I was slow on that one also. Barry is probably going to spend the next day in bed with ice packs on the sore places. I hope no one has to carry him back. Good writing, Al. 😀 — Suzanne

  3. Greetings!
    Don’t we all know someone like that? Makes me sad…the poor human body is not designed for couch-potato living.
    I was anticipating a bit more after he started the hike. The story was a lot to tell in a few words, but I suppose I was hoping for more action and less overview. I also didn’t understand why “intense” had to be bold and italicized?
    Glad he bucked up in the end and went with it!
    Happy trails! 🙂

  4. I mistook the highlighted word to be linked to another challenge! But of course I am not claiming I would have caught the pun otherwise – pretty slow on catching them. Much to my son’s disgust. Nicely done 🙂

  5. I am embarrassed to say it took a few minutes for the intense line to sink in. Now that I get it, more my fault then yours, you had a great build up to that line.

    • Thank you. I love making the puns so they are hard to find sometimes or so subtle that they can only bee spotted when read aloud 🙂

  6. Barry probably realized he didn’t have the skills to survive outdoors – even for a day – having spent so much of his free time at a game console. Thus, he needed to play nice with these people; lest they take him deep into the countryside and abandon him as the sun set.

  7. So what made it intense? I would like to hear about him getting pummelled or something. Some angry threats etc…. threats. I mean it takes a lot to convince a guy like that to shut up. Details lol 🙂 nicely done Al.

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